SMUM The First Day in The United States as An Immigrant Essay
I want something that looks like personal narrative. something like first day of coming to the United States as an immigrant. I will paste the instruction here. I also want a draft at first and full four page of the paper sepratly. use your own personal if you want or make up one, it doesn’t matter.
What’s your first step?
Select an event that is short enough to write 4-5 pages about. If you try to do too much, you will likely
struggle. If you choose an event that is too brief, then you will likely struggle to reach the minimum of
four full pages.
When writing this paper, the most common mistake is that writers tell what happened when they need to
show instead. What does this mean?
- Example: The sentence “He was angry” does not show. It tells. To show, you must add specifics.
Help readers imagine what you mean. Try this: The gargantuan man’s eyes bulged out, he was
sweating, and his hands were tight fists. He marched up to the manager and loudly shouted “I
want my money back!” Now we can see what you mean by angry.
- How about this sentence: “I have a dog.”
As a reader, what kind of dog are you picturing? A black Lab? A Husky? A Shih Tzu? What
color is the dog? How big is the dog? Male or female dog? Smelly dog? Wet dog? You get the
idea. It is important to show the reader what you want them to see.
- Another example: people often say “he was always there for me.” Do you mean that he stood in
the same place, rain or shine, so you knew where to find him? Of course not; that is ridiculous.
no—he rescued you, time and time again, when no one else could—or would.
The example paper below does not say “he was always there for me” but instead devotes the
whole paper to showing one of those times he was there for the writer.
In the case of your assignment, devote the whole paper to showing the significance of the event
that is the topic of your paper.
Don’t use clichés
- The sample paper does not say “he’d give you the shirt off his back.” This statement is a
cliché. The first time someone said that, 400 years ago, it was cool. Now it’s a sign that
says that you don’t know how to write. Instead, the sample paper shows one day when
Larry was that generous. Your job in your paper is to show showing the significance of
the event that is the topic of your paper.
Dialog is optional for this paper.